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| Ok new song, really want some feedback on it please...... didn't get really any from my last couple I posted  but anyway, its a different approach to my usual writing.
Black and White Ties
Hello, how are you now,
I would drown you,
but you're so clever,
why couldn't you find me,
the windows passing by,
glass glaring on our eyes,
how can you sleep,
why couldn't you cry,
for me, I die,
every night when I try,
with my hands wrapped around,
grasping your throat,
a tear drop cries,
and another one dies,
bound in black and white ties,
Hello, can you hear me,
do those black lines rape thee,
I could kill tonight,
but I would rather give you a lie,
the hourglass folds itself in,
trapping time inside,
without a second lost,
I throw down your old feelings,
run over them with my dying eye,
if I can see these curving walls,
then why can't you be left behind
Hello can you breathe,
grasping those lungs with cries,
this time I'll get it right,
there is no changing,
and no defending,
against what you didn't create,
lying with someone who relies,
on nothing but her lies,
you're never going to get it right,
but you can hope on this promise,
and believe that one day you'll die
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you've got talent hun',keep posting and dont worry either-I know you'll get some responses. 