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    My Poetry

    nanki_c
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    nanki_c08-07-2004 17:38
    from the moment i met u,
    i knew we wer ment 2 b
    i kno u felt it too
    we're da same in evry way

    u were there 4 me
    thru evrything, evry sting, evry bite
    i kno u'll see
    me thru evry fite

    ill go beyond limits 4 u
    i kno u'll do the same 4 me
    ur neva far 4rm my mind
    ill care 4 u endlessly

    i rote these lines
    coz ur soul matches mine.
    ....................................................................
    every word u say is a little jolt to my heart,
    every thought in my head shouts out your name,
    my heart breaks while we're apart,
    every breath in ur lungs is a tiny little gift to me.

    My mind races when i hear ur voice,
    ur an endless picture in my mind,
    my heart faces an endless battle to tell you how much i love u,
    we're two of a kind.

    Just saying 1 word to u brightens my day,
    seeing your face shines a light through my eyes,
    this is all i wanted to say,
    I dont want to hide behind lies..
    ......................................................................

    i luv u
    u say u do too
    but all that is - is a lie,
    sumtn fake,
    u dont mean a single word u say,
    m just a face in d background..
    calling out ur name
    but u don hear me..

    i luv u
    u sed u did too
    how did those words go to waste?

    .......................................................

    all alone
    on my own again
    in a wasteland of nothingness.. a barren land
    my life..

    boredom, emptiness, lonliness.. sad n alone
    lost the ppl who cared for me
    lost the ppl who i care for..

    all alone
    in this battlezone..
    called home

    all alone,
    on my own again..
    in my bubble of self loathing and hate

    no one knos me
    no one cares
    no one knos the person inside the ugly exterior
    beauty is only skin deep
    why dont u look alittle further?

    all alone..

    ........................................................

    i loved u
    n i stil do
    but m wounded..

    stick a knife in me..
    break all my bones
    crack my skull, crush my lings
    nothing will hurt me more..
    than this pain

    i'm bleeding inside
    m dying
    ur killing me
    m dying.

    .........................................................
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    nanki_c
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    nanki_c28-10-2009 00:39
    So, I haven't posted in here for wow, three years almost. I have written things in that time but at some point, people stopped posting things like poetry on here and stopped commenting. But anyway, I wanted some feedback on a couple of poems. Criticism etc is welcome! I'm not really sure what I think of them myself but any feedback would help. Thanks =).
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    Sounds of the Aurora

    I see blue-green lights shimmering,
    Effervescent in the fog,
    Inexplicable and otherworldly.
    My heart pulses at the sight,
    Throbbing within me,
    And I imagine the blood rushing Through my veins, my arteries,
    Fuelling my spirit.

    And my stomach drops at the sound,
    And I tingle,
    Lost in the crescendo,
    In the beauty that rips the heart out Of me.

    Strange voices,
    Sounds of another universe,
    Draw me in like ignis fatuus, marsh lights,
    And sweep me away,
    Only to let me float
    Into the cold glimmering lights
    Of the aurora.

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    Fragments

    The air was wrent with a scream
    Only we could hear;
    Fragments - burning, melting glass,
    Twinkling in the dusk,
    Spinning out of control - too fast -
    To capture the moment
    With
    Burnt fingertips,
    Burnt on your caramel skin.
    Burning fragments
    Float down onto our
    Burning bodies,
    Scars only we can see.

    Cauterisation;
    But it hurts too much.

    zjenn4
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    zjenn428-10-2009 03:16
    I like your word choice and the descriptions you use. I could easily picture the scene you were describing, well, at least in the way my mind was portraying it.

    I am not sure your true intent, but for me, the first one kind of made me think about a lost soul or something entering "the light." The second one, felt like people caught in a fire?

    I liked them. Most of the time when ppl (usually newbs) post their poems, they're about some squishy love scene, or, they're some hate poem about the angry broken heart. I liked the fact yours aren't. Well, I guess they could be, but not overly so if that were the case.
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