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sorta song? or poem...?

 
27-01-2004 03:22Meghan_Mae is offline Meghan_Mae  

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Lemme know wat you think.....

HES EVERYTHING....

i've filled myself with emptiness,
i have filled myself with you
well now i think i've had enough,
what we had was far from true,
the pain you brought is done along with the dead,
its cursed and plagued my head,
god don't let this song be static to your ears,
from what i can hear,
im screaming loud and clear,

**he's everything you wernt he's everything you’d never be,
forget i told you my fears,
forget you were in my dreams,
blow them like leaves in the wind
there is only so much i can say,
and boy i'll tell you this: he's everything you wernt,
he's everything you could never be**

i hope im not your safety net,
i cut those strings so long ago,
i hope she's all you wanted,
im sure she's not like me,
never can fill my shoes,
now you look at me so dressed to kill,
do you remember what you were thinking?
when you made your last goodbye?

sympathy? never....
i've got the person that is oh just right,
the high feeling that fills me day to night,
i cant make out your face anymore, just a blur, your way out of my sight,
finally i can breathe a new love,
air set free from my lungs,
just thought i’d let you know

**he's everything you wernt he's everything you’d never be,
forget i told you my fears,
forget you were in my dreams,
blow them like leaves in the wind
there is only so much i can say,
and boy i'll tell you this: he's everything you wernt,
he's everything you could never be**


Yea.. incase u havent noticed... sad lil emo girl... ^**right here**>




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27-01-2004 03:58LuckixAngel is offline LuckixAngel 

135 posts
i like this. it's really good. although some of the lines that rhyme with the last word dont match with the rhythm. like one sentence has more syllables than the other. example:

my love for just runs so strong
with you, my love, i do belong
27-01-2004 04:30Meghan_Mae is offline Meghan_Mae 

4 posts
thanks! i will try and work on that.... im always looking for some constructive yet positve comments!
27-01-2004 17:17Trevin_S is offline Trevin_S 

179 posts
good job i like it.


Matt??
27-01-2004 17:25jollie_jane is offline jollie_jane 

437 posts
i actually kinda like it...out of all love poems
27-01-2004 17:29ice_white_tiger is offline ice_white_tiger 


14,780 posts
that could really work as a song.

Theyd be good lyrics. Very Very great!
28-01-2004 19:29Meghan_Mae is offline Meghan_Mae 

4 posts
aww thank you everyone! i really love writting songs.. poems too but im more of a music person... i should have some more stuff on here soon.. i want it to be good tho lol... and i write for people too.. like i wrote songs for some friends bands.. and for some girls who just wanted somthing for thier profile on aim.... feel free to ask....

i would really love to get with some1 on here and talk to them on aim and make a song/poem together.... i like seeing other peoples writting stlyes.... so if u wanna do it... just im me on aim or on yahoo....

AIM- So0o Overrated

Yahoo- lil_meghan_mae_00





(( to trevin... ummm im not to sure for matt.... it just sorta came out when jon got with jess.... sorta self medicating))

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