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26-01-2004 23:59 KrZeeKLutZ |
404 posts
| Wow that really moved me. I like I like!  |
| 26-01-2004 23:59 KrZeeKLutZ |
404 posts
| And welcome to the forum by the way! |
| 27-01-2004 00:00 DaRkSiDe |
21,558 posts
| Welcome aboard!!  |
| 27-01-2004 00:06 Trevin_S |
179 posts
| thank you all a lot!! |
| 27-01-2004 00:10 jollie_jane |
437 posts
| it's good
critisism: it might be easier to read if u put it on dif lines instead riting it in a paragraph, but maybe thats wat u intended to do in oreder to achieve a special effect of confusion and skipping lines
the other thing is it skipps from one topict o another and all i understood was not understand ur morals, lonliness, disaster and some other gibberish, that again could have resulted from me skipping lines cuz it was hard to read, but it conveyed a powerful meaning and i got something out of it
P.S. welcome to the forum, sorry for jumping out at u like this, ya keep posting, good job though  |
| 27-01-2004 00:18 Trevin_S |
179 posts
| i am not sure i understand what you mean by the format you think it should be in so you can im me and explain further if you want at
"for all of this3" thats my AIM sn but i do appreciate the critisism i am sure it will help somehow. |
| 27-01-2004 00:21 aflackoh6 |
28,546 posts
| she means itd be easier if you posted it like:
laying out from the world
your morals make no sense to me
but ill keep trying
trying to see why your gone and im here all alone again
so now ill turn my head and cover these eyes
bleeding with fear its where i belong
and now being alone is just the start
of something bueatiful
in a disaster for itself
ill never understand you
ill never understand your morals or the way that you make me feel this way
but ill keep trying. |
| 27-01-2004 00:24 Trevin_S |
179 posts
| o yes i understand now...but i wrote those poems on the computer in my im box and i cant press enter or else it will send and ruin it all. i didnt really feel like transfering it to that format but i will try if it confuses people thanks. |
| 27-01-2004 00:25 aflackoh6 |
28,546 posts
| you can copy them to the reply box here and use the enter key...it doesnt auto send it...well, i guess you knew that, lol |
| 27-01-2004 00:26 Trevin_S |
179 posts
| yeah thanks for the help |
| 27-01-2004 00:28 aflackoh6 |
28,546 posts
| oh yeah...if its an msn im, pressing 'shift' and then 'enter' will take you down a line |
| 27-01-2004 00:39 jollie_jane |
437 posts
| trevin, im sorry, but i dont have the AIM thinga mabob, ya but get a hotmail email and we ould talk on MSN, or not, but ya soory for not making myself clear good job, wnna see some of ur riting |
| 27-01-2004 00:41 radiate86 |
3,311 posts
| That was really good! And welcome! I'm Annie.  |
| 27-01-2004 00:43 Trevin_S |
179 posts
| i used to have msn and do not anymore but i think i might still have my email address it is Trevin239@msn.com....if not try Trevin239@yahoo.com |
| 27-01-2004 00:46 Trevin_S |
179 posts
| if you dont mind check out my poem "october" i think its in the format you are talking about |
| 27-01-2004 00:52 jollie_jane |
437 posts
| ya okay u do still have an email there all u have to do is go to msn. com and download msn messenger...its kinda cool, but ya i will check out the poem[/offtopic][offtopic] |
| 27-01-2004 00:55 Trevin_S |
179 posts
| ok i will download that what is your name i can talk to you at again? |
| 27-01-2004 00:58 jollie_jane |
437 posts
| i added u so when u sign in there will be a little window saying jollie_jane @hotmail.com added u do u want this person to talk to u? and then u press yes or no (hopefully yes) and then ya thats it |
| 27-01-2004 01:01 DNA_Maniac |
4,823 posts
| yea kinda better!
well if its the meeting part ok so;
hi am the maniac!
WELCOME ABORD
well i used to call as evil crtsyzer as well..
i dunno why. 
lol
DRAGS 'N' ALCOHOL |
| 27-01-2004 01:45 Trevin_S |
179 posts
| hi thanks a lot i see that you have looked at all of my work are u intrested in my writing? |
| 27-01-2004 01:48 DNA_Maniac |
4,823 posts
| ermm...
*looks around* me?
DRAGS 'N' ALCOHOL |
| 27-01-2004 02:08 Trevin_S |
179 posts
| yeah you lol |
| 27-01-2004 02:09 Trevin_S |
179 posts
| check my new one out
"this love" tell me what you think |
| 27-01-2004 03:59 LuckixAngel |
135 posts
| hey, this one's cool, man. keep writing dude.  |
| 27-01-2004 17:47 jollie_jane |
437 posts
| *bump* |
