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@ 17-10-2003 10:44 fruity | 
12,214 posts
| hey everybody. it seems like the army has some kind of a tendency 2 inspire me 2 write. so here I'm gonaa share wit u some of the things I wrote there during the last 2 weeks. I didn't manage 2 bring all of the stuff wit me yesterday when I came back, therefore I'll add them next week (btw- I'm finishing my course on a week and 2 days {but who's counting? lol} and I'm gonna b here on an every-day basis again. c this as an official warning.) so here they r! (don't shoot me)
A tender breath,
although it's last.
A softened smile,
just for a while.
That sweet-heared tone,
before there's none.
Quick blink of eye,
and then
she dies
so beautiful and so divine,
just like she was afore months-nine.
A kiss from God,
a drop of blood,
a new-born child,
and mother's
gone.
this one has a special meaning 4 me, and if any of u would get it, then my purpose is fulfilled-
You were my eyes.
You were my soul.
You were my heart.
You were my whole.
No hands to hold.
No mouth to speak.
Just two strong legs
and wish to seek
the hidden eyes,
the hidden soul,
the hidden heart
that kept it all,
the hands that held,
the mouth that talked,
but all that's found
are legs
that walked
the endless way
into nowhere,
since all I had
was lie to bear.
and this one I wrote just two days ago-
You make me cry
into the night.
I feel ashamed,
I want to fight,
don't cry no more,
make these tears stop,
can't take it, no,
I had enough.
You cause me pain,
I don't know why,
yet what I feel
is need to cry.
The words can hurt
although they're nice,
unless they're meaningful,
they're lies.
So stop it, please,
I beg of you,
can't take in ease
those things you do.
You're cruel,
yet soft,
and clueless too,
don't know what you
still put me through.
How can those
honey lips of yours
fill-up my heart
with all them sores?
Look straight in my
weeping eyes
and tell me-
are you willing to sacrifice?
tht would b it 4 now. I'll b glad 2 c wht u think of them- and the most important thing- b honest! |
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 0  @ 27-06-2004 21:28 fruity |
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| lol no that's great, shira, I'm really glad it got to you in such a way that you wanna analize it. and I already found one phrase for you that was put in the wrong way after I litherally translated it from Hebrew- her heart didn't miss a beat, but skipped a beat lol | | 0 @ 23-07-2004 12:11 fruity |
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| this is for my dear father. I love you.
when I'll go to the stone
and I'll see your name
I'll know that it's true.
both hands are warm
both eyes are dry
but I can't hide from you.
and I look for above
and I see only stars
and they say that I'll know.
but only at nights
when everyone's gone,
I can't let you go.
yes, only at nights,
when no one's around,
I won't let you go.
the days will keep passing
the lives will keep guessing
but my arms will be strong.
'cause only at nights
when there's no one to judge,
I'll never be wrong.
yes, only at nights
when your shadow's around,
the pain won't be long.
memory of a touch,
of a word,
of a stare
will promise me
that you'll always be there
and even if my eyes
wouldn't hang a tear low
you know that my heart
will NOT let you go
you know that my soul
will NOT take it slow
you know that my mind
will NOT let it show
but you know
only at nights
I wet the pillow
and only forever
I'll keep loving you so.
| | 0 @ 23-07-2004 12:12 Dekar | 36,117 posts
| That's beautiful | | 0 @ 23-07-2004 13:35 icefyre | 
10,980 posts
| heartfelt and beautiful | | 0 @ 23-07-2004 13:38 blondi3542 | 348 posts
| omg fruity theyre really really good!!! especially the last one.. *wipes away tear* | | 0 @ 23-07-2004 13:45 fruity |
12,214 posts
| thank you so much  | | 0 @ 23-07-2004 14:22 ellessilver | 2,223 posts
| I really liked the last one... Absolutely beautiful. | | 0 @ 25-07-2004 12:46 fruity |
12,214 posts
| there are number of things
I've been meaning to tell you-
Number one,
Number two,
Number three.
as it seems you can't
sink-in the things that I show you,
can't ever exactly get me.
I feel like I'm mute,
or you're deaf,
oh so blind
like my words are mysterious
to you
like there's some silky veil
covering both your eyes,
which you can't see anything through.
and you can't see anything through.
and you know very well that you do
deep in the inside of you.
I whisper the words
and you don't see the pain
I draw you a picture
and your eyes are shut down,
you NOTICE some things
and you don't say a word
what a fraud, I may think,
what a fraud.
but I don't.
'cause you're just a child
that cannot
ever never see
my point. | | 0 @ 25-07-2004 13:03 icefyre |
10,980 posts
| i like the way it ends on that sharp syllable 'point' it makes it sound like it snaps the person out of their trance and lack of understanding. good as always 
I hope you're doing ok 
* offtopic :
you're poems always seem to be in the same form... maybe you should experiment with other verse structures sometime...
| | 0 @ 25-07-2004 13:06 the_locust | 5,582 posts
| Neta the one to your father was beautiful, is really was. You could tell there was so much emotion behind.. I hope you're coping alright, you've got a good talent for writing The last one was pretty too, I liked the last four lines. | | 0 @ 27-07-2004 20:13 fruity |
12,214 posts
| *
I had you
inside of me
on that night.
I had you
inside of me,
it felt right.
I had you,
not literally,
but on my mind.
I had you
inside of me
on that night.
*
| | 0 @ 30-07-2004 11:45 fruity |
12,214 posts
| ok this is, for a change, not a poem, but a song. I have a lil melody for it, but obviously I can't put it in here, plus I don't know to read notes. so... I hope you'd like it by the words, but just know it has a certain structure.
you had me fooled. (tam tam tam)
like I knew you. (tam tam tam) }jazz style.
it's like the truth. (tam tam tam)
you saw it too.
you gave me signs. (tam tam tam)
you told me lies. (tam tam tam) }jazz style.
you closed my eyes. (tam tam tam)
we wore desguise.
(tic tic tic tic tic tic tic)
you are the tiger,
I am the lion,
there's no relief inside of me, }guitars, drums...
the war keeps going,
but the eyes just cannot
see..
I am the lion,
you are the tiger,
green eyes that never meant to be }guitars, drum
the justice's crazy
and the soul won't let it
free...
(tam tam tam. tam
tam tam tam. tam)
I thought you are. (tam tam tam)
but ever far. (tam tam tam) } jazz + classical
a wishing star. (tam tam tam)
now all is scars...
(tic tic tic tic tic)
you are the lion,
I am the tiger,
there's no relief inside of me, }guitars, drums..
the war keeps going,
but the eyes just cannot
see..
I am the tiger,
you are the lion,
green eyes that never meant to be }guitars, drum
the justice's crazy
and the soul won't let it
free..
we are the tigers,
we are the lions,
each is the force inside of thee,
each is the *weakness* that takes lead of }rock..
history..
each is a lion,
each is a tiger,
everyone's faulty for believes }rock..
the world means nothing
if the people strive for grieves.
(tam tam tam. tam
tam tam tam. tam
tam tam tam. tam)
ahhhhhhhhhh (violin plays in the background+ piano) we are all tigers! la la la... you are the lion....
(slowly fades)
| | 0 @ 02-08-2004 12:44 fruity |
12,214 posts
| this one's because Matityahu asks very nicely.
a stab on the finger,
she rushes away
the blood is as red
as the love.
it hurt her before
but she beggs it to stay
no pain is as sore
as the starve.
keeps having the cake,
and eating it too,
but never gets
totally full.
the eyes, they can't lie
and they're telling her clear-
you're showing yourself as a fool.
the days that now passed
could not really last,
she has not a doubt, now,
it seems.
it's over, you see
how long can one be
misled by their
personal dreams?
ohh Cinderella,
wake up.
ohh Cinderella
woke up.
ohh her magic
had
STOPPED. | | 0 @ 03-08-2004 15:34 fruity |
12,214 posts
| prima ballerina.
her dancefloor shines with lights of fame
she's skipping over drops of sweat and blood.
the moves so planned, the act's so tame
it's like a magic spell had flung the crowd.
her eyes are closed, her dance is still
so powerful inside her true divine.
can't touch the love, can't feel the thrill
can't capture all they see as crystal shine.
a leap to there, a hop to here
they look amazed as she carves, dazzled out.
her footsteps heared as if so near
her bones slam wearily against the ground.
a slender body down the line (and they call her prima ballerina)
a weak dream seeker isn't mine (and they want her, prima ballerina)
a shattered heart, a broken soul (and they'll make her, prima ballerina)
a little girl with no control (wake up darling, prima ballerina
no more) | | 0 @ 08-08-2004 12:08 fruity |
12,214 posts
| the clock keeps ticking
as she puts her love on delay
the days keeps passing
and no sun is shown
the feelings she once had
are not worthy to stay
for this is not the truth,
and she was always wrong
forgive me,
I'm sorry,
don't know anymore
can't spend no more days
outside of the door,
she wished it,
she wants it,
she will always pray,
but she doesn't know
that her love's
on delay. | | 0 @ 15-08-2004 21:39 fruity |
12,214 posts
| two poems.
the betrayal
silently it's coming near you
on its tip toes, not a sound to be heared.
from the dark corner
that was always lighted
and you had no idea.
they are lying if they say you loved me
you never did, and that's the truth.
you never cared as much as I thought,
as much as I cared about you.
behind your back
it comes to get you,
to stab its teeth
inside your soul.
to sink dark lies
into your whole
to make it easier to fall.
besides, the faith can't always stay
there's always room for more betrayal.
how is it like to be so cared?
how is it like to not see who's there?
you know you're the luckiest of all
once you do not hear the call.
if it's a whisper in your hear
know for sure, I'm here
to take care of you always
and never be noticed.
how is it like to love the unreached?
how is it like to want the bewitched?
to weave a legend
of lies
I will always miss eyes.
be smart
give up
be smart
open up
it's like a dream
and it shall not come true.
| | 0 @ 15-08-2004 21:42 icefyre |
10,980 posts
| wow. both good, especially 'the betrayl'
your poems always flow so perfectly and effortlessly  | | 0 @ 16-08-2004 14:53 TheA15 | 1,340 posts
| Oi Neta... The betrayel one... is it just like I do, hypothetically, or it's from life experience? I mean, something that happened recently?
I liked Betryal!
Cheers | | 0 @ 17-08-2004 19:32 fruity |
12,214 posts
| thank you.. 
when you were born
you were the child
of love.
when they all were arguing,
screaming
and fighting,
you were the peaceful one.
never to use a bad word,
and eyes to only see well.
it was no night to you.
full moons always bright.
but you never knew
that the child of love
is abstained of
one secret desire
of emotion.
the ones who wish
for love
to complete the world
are the ones to never achieve it. | | 0 @ 17-08-2004 21:12 fruity |
12,214 posts
| braids
they say that braids are a symbole.
for unity.
for connection.
for strength.
it's taking three seperate matters,
and combining them into one.
when twisting around one another,
things become whole.
I once saw a braid.
made me feel weak.
as if every part is for making the whole
and not being the whole for itself.
as if a loss of uniqeness.
well, they say that my black eyes can't lie,
but all I see eventually,
is a wholesome mass of braids,
covering
on a black hole. | | 0 @ 20-08-2004 12:33 fruity |
12,214 posts
| I was not supposed to cry
when you kissed me.
was not supposed to cry
when you said you really care.
I
was not supposed to
cry
when you put your arms around me
was not supposed to
when you
looked with that stare.
I was not supposed to
tell
what I did
but it's over.
I was not supposed to
since it ended with a cry.
I was not supposed to
do a lot of stuff,
we know that
but you
were not supposed to
say goodbye. | | 0 @ 20-08-2004 12:41 the_Apocalypse | 14,257 posts
| I like this one hun, it's pretty good. | | 0 @ 20-08-2004 13:03 fruity |
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| thank you, Arno | | 0 @ 26-08-2004 16:24 fruity |
12,214 posts
| omg omg.. I just realized how prophetic my last poem was.... omg omg..  | | 0 @ 26-08-2004 18:24 blondi3542 | 348 posts
| i bow down 2 u and dekar, fruity! u 2 r the only ones whos poems show true feeling!
* offtopic :
wud put bowing smiley but dont no how...
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