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0 likes - like | 08-07-2004 17:38 nanki_c  
nanki_c
 
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from the moment i met u,
i knew we wer ment 2 b
i kno u felt it too
we're da same in evry way

u were there 4 me
thru evrything, evry sting, evry bite
i kno u'll see
me thru evry fite

ill go beyond limits 4 u
i kno u'll do the same 4 me
ur neva far 4rm my mind
ill care 4 u endlessly

i rote these lines
coz ur soul matches mine.
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every word u say is a little jolt to my heart,
every thought in my head shouts out your name,
my heart breaks while we're apart,
every breath in ur lungs is a tiny little gift to me.

My mind races when i hear ur voice,
ur an endless picture in my mind,
my heart faces an endless battle to tell you how much i love u,
we're two of a kind.

Just saying 1 word to u brightens my day,
seeing your face shines a light through my eyes,
this is all i wanted to say,
I dont want to hide behind lies..
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i luv u
u say u do too
but all that is - is a lie,
sumtn fake,
u dont mean a single word u say,
m just a face in d background..
calling out ur name
but u don hear me..

i luv u
u sed u did too
how did those words go to waste?

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all alone
on my own again
in a wasteland of nothingness.. a barren land
my life..

boredom, emptiness, lonliness.. sad n alone
lost the ppl who cared for me
lost the ppl who i care for..

all alone
in this battlezone..
called home

all alone,
on my own again..
in my bubble of self loathing and hate

no one knos me
no one cares
no one knos the person inside the ugly exterior
beauty is only skin deep
why dont u look alittle further?

all alone..

........................................................

i loved u
n i stil do
but m wounded..

stick a knife in me..
break all my bones
crack my skull, crush my lings
nothing will hurt me more..
than this pain

i'm bleeding inside
m dying
ur killing me
m dying.

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0 likes - like | 28-10-2009 00:39 nanki_c 
nanki_c
 
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So, I haven't posted in here for wow, three years almost. I have written things in that time but at some point, people stopped posting things like poetry on here and stopped commenting. But anyway, I wanted some feedback on a couple of poems. Criticism etc is welcome! I'm not really sure what I think of them myself but any feedback would help. Thanks =).
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Sounds of the Aurora

I see blue-green lights shimmering,
Effervescent in the fog,
Inexplicable and otherworldly.
My heart pulses at the sight,
Throbbing within me,
And I imagine the blood rushing Through my veins, my arteries,
Fuelling my spirit.

And my stomach drops at the sound,
And I tingle,
Lost in the crescendo,
In the beauty that rips the heart out Of me.

Strange voices,
Sounds of another universe,
Draw me in like ignis fatuus, marsh lights,
And sweep me away,
Only to let me float
Into the cold glimmering lights
Of the aurora.

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Fragments

The air was wrent with a scream
Only we could hear;
Fragments - burning, melting glass,
Twinkling in the dusk,
Spinning out of control - too fast -
To capture the moment
With
Burnt fingertips,
Burnt on your caramel skin.
Burning fragments
Float down onto our
Burning bodies,
Scars only we can see.

Cauterisation;
But it hurts too much.

0 likes - like | 28-10-2009 03:16 zjenn4 
zjenn4
 
19,560 posts
I like your word choice and the descriptions you use. I could easily picture the scene you were describing, well, at least in the way my mind was portraying it.

I am not sure your true intent, but for me, the first one kind of made me think about a lost soul or something entering "the light." The second one, felt like people caught in a fire?

I liked them. Most of the time when ppl (usually newbs) post their poems, they're about some squishy love scene, or, they're some hate poem about the angry broken heart. I liked the fact yours aren't. Well, I guess they could be, but not overly so if that were the case.

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